Grade Me.

[Shawn_]

As it stands, I'd give you low 70s.

It is a little too repetitive for it's length. And never ever ever use "you" in a formal piece of writing.

 

[jebckr]

Got some grammatical errors, good content allthough it repeats itself a bit. Word choice could use some work.

Future referance, post these like 3 days in advance. I'll gladly edit it for you then. also, I'm a member at a essay correction site. If you send me the word doc a day in advance I can sumit it there for you.

 

[venom]

That is good i would have to give u a B+ for it though, but i hope you get a higher mark.

 

[Billyy]

Thanks everyone, I'm turning this paper in today with most of your thoughts in consideration, changing things. And Jebckr, I might take you up on that offer.

 

[cambiasso]

F for epic failure lulz.

 

[Billyy]

[sarcasm] I'm glad 7 of you(People who gave me an F) took this very seriously. [/sarcasm]

Anyway, I turned in that paper today, waiting for the results. It might not be until after Christmas break though.

 

[Jansen]

Lots of run-on sentences. Short paragraphs. I give you a C-

 

[Billyy]

Did you see Shredder's edits? I used most of those, and I fixed up my work after looking at everyone else's suggestions.

 

[Bullnich]

B-, the problems are that you need to indent each paragraph. The other problem is you need to make the first and last paragraph longer. Paragraphs should range from 5-8 sentences each.