Some work for school

Promised Lucas I would post this a while ago but I forgot lele
Anywho, these were my final designs, feel free to CnC

(I changed the quote a bit in this because the original was retarded)

 

[44k]

Colour palette on the second one is nice. Probably the best of the bunch.

The first piece is a cool concept, however there's a lot of dead space between the lettering. Can you see how much better it looks between '- Think type is something that should be-'. It's condensed, and it looks good.
The rest of it seems a little misplaced, like it was just thrown on there, ja feel?
Just play around with things to fill the gaps, resize, try out some different fonts and the letter spacing function.

The last one is pretty dark, and lacks depth. By that I mean, it's very static, there's not a lot of background to foreground differentiation.
The main stock of the guy looks like he's just been cut and paste into the foreground. There's no interaction with the background.
Try adding variant blurs to the objects in the background to give it depth.
Also try interacting the shapes with him. Here's and example which I made like 3 years ago :>

See how the shapes sorta wrap around the person, and are blurred in places?
Anyways, I've ranted way too much. Sorry

Keep up the work mate

 

Colour palette on the second one is nice. Probably the best of the bunch.

The first piece is a cool concept, however there's a lot of dead space between the lettering. Can you see how much better it looks between '- Think type is something that should be-'. It's condensed, and it looks good.
The rest of it seems a little misplaced, like it was just thrown on there, ja feel?
Just play around with things to fill the gaps, resize, try out some different fonts and the letter spacing function.

The last one is pretty dark, and lacks depth. By that I mean, it's very static, there's not a lot of background to foreground differentiation.
The main stock of the guy looks like he's just been cut and paste into the foreground. There's no interaction with the background.
Try adding variant blurs to the objects in the background to give it depth.
Also try interacting the shapes with him. Here's and example which I made like 3 years ago :>

See how the shapes sorta wrap around the person, and are blurred in places?
Anyways, I've ranted way too much. Sorry

Keep up the work mate

Don't be sorry, I appreciate in-depth nit-picky evaluations of my work as without true CnC one can never hope to get better.

 

[bigk1121]

i thank the first one looks grate all except fro beautiful should be a bit bigger or wider or you could raise the curning up an then move it up so the b an f will be beside should be if you know what i mean.(it might look weird tho it was just an ideal i had to fix the negative space there.
the second one is perfect maybe add some of them thing where it splits like you did on the 3rd ones hand.
the third one like astro said it needs to be blend in to the scene more. maybe take the big triangle an put it in front of him just the bottom of it tho. that might pull it together.

dont get me wrong they are all grate designs!

 

bump.

 

[Lvl 75 Def]

First is a good concept, the 'i do' just doesn't fit and the beautiful lacks some flourish type of design to really make it pop (imo). 2nd is ok but you could've adjusted the lighting so it actually looks good and the render is kinda offtone and bad quality. As Astro said you could've made it more interactive by making the shapes more dynamic and looping around etc