Ryan's Written Work [LINK] - Join To Battle Me!
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Ryan don't got shit on me, 2nd to none but me. With me aside he is pretty damn good. Visit his site!
Merchant Millz
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Merchant Millz
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I suck at rapping so ur gonna kill me
Ehh, i'm not feeling your verses too much.
Saying "thought we were friends til the beginning to the end" makes it sound like some Christina Aguilera shit.
I'll battle you when i'm not so tired.
I have a couple on the official battles thread if you want to take a look.
Saying "thought we were friends til the beginning to the end" makes it sound like some Christina Aguilera shit.
I'll battle you when i'm not so tired.
I have a couple on the official battles thread if you want to take a look.
That verse was written for a friend, not for me. I was writing for her.
What's it lacking? Flow? I don't know what to change if you don't tell me.
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Yeah the flow of it (as how i would interpuret (sp?) just dont go right. I know raps dont have to and a lot of times dont have many but i think you should put a few rhyme's in it at points. Not really sure if that would help or not just an idea.
Merchant Millz
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YAHHH
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Nice work, try making a profession of it?
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these poems all have a good idea to it. but the sentence flow and rhythm isn't clear and smooth, in feelings and behind my back.
I like runnin' the most, kind of funny and great flow.
overall, nice work
I like runnin' the most, kind of funny and great flow.
overall, nice work
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Angelgrinder
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Meh...
do u rap on real life experience? keep up the good work
