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  1. Unread #1 - Jan 22, 2008 at 7:44 AM
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    Edited.
     
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  3. Unread #2 - Jan 22, 2008 at 7:47 AM
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    Ryan don't got shit on me, 2nd to none but me. With me aside he is pretty damn good. Visit his site!
     
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  5. Unread #3 - Jan 22, 2008 at 8:21 AM
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    Lol @ tilt. Come take me one on one yo' (Inside Joke)
     
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  7. Unread #4 - Jan 23, 2008 at 4:04 PM
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  9. Unread #5 - Jan 24, 2008 at 8:29 AM
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    Accepted your battle.

    It's on :p
     
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  11. Unread #6 - Jan 24, 2008 at 4:18 PM
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    I suck at rapping so ur gonna kill me
     
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  13. Unread #7 - Jan 24, 2008 at 5:40 PM
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    Ehh, i'm not feeling your verses too much.
    Saying "thought we were friends til the beginning to the end" makes it sound like some Christina Aguilera shit.
    I'll battle you when i'm not so tired.
    I have a couple on the official battles thread if you want to take a look.
     
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  15. Unread #8 - Jan 24, 2008 at 7:09 PM
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    Lol , havent seen anyone else's and im not a rapper myself... but to be honest it is severely lacking, and i think you think your better than what you really are. just one man's opinion ,
     
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  17. Unread #9 - Jan 25, 2008 at 2:59 AM
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    That verse was written for a friend, not for me. I was writing for her.

    What's it lacking? Flow? I don't know what to change if you don't tell me.
     
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  19. Unread #10 - Jan 25, 2008 at 4:23 PM
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    Yeah the flow of it (as how i would interpuret (sp?) just dont go right. I know raps dont have to and a lot of times dont have many but i think you should put a few rhyme's in it at points. Not really sure if that would help or not just an idea.
     
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  21. Unread #11 - Jan 28, 2008 at 4:07 PM
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    I got rp'ed
     
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  23. Unread #12 - Jan 29, 2008 at 8:42 AM
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    Nice work, try making a profession of it?
     
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  25. Unread #13 - Jan 30, 2008 at 8:09 PM
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    these poems all have a good idea to it. but the sentence flow and rhythm isn't clear and smooth, in feelings and behind my back.
    I like runnin' the most, kind of funny and great flow.
    overall, nice work :p
     
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  27. Unread #14 - Jan 31, 2008 at 11:45 PM
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    Meh...
     
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  29. Unread #15 - Jan 31, 2008 at 11:53 PM
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    some stuff doesn't rhyme... but it's still pretty good, i like ur ideas n stories. :) do u rap on real life experience? keep up the good work
     
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  31. Unread #16 - Feb 1, 2008 at 12:22 AM
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    Wow, the Luke[faggot] rap is actually very good.
     
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