Ryan's Written Work [LINK] - Join To Battle Me!

[Ryan]

Edited.

 

[full_tilt]

Ryan don't got shit on me, 2nd to none but me. With me aside he is pretty damn good. Visit his site!

 

[Ryan]

Lol @ tilt. Come take me one on one yo' (Inside Joke)

 

[Merchant Millz]

=joined

 

[Ryan]

Accepted your battle.

It's on

 

[Merchant Millz]

I suck at rapping so ur gonna kill me

 

[Young Murda]

Ehh, i'm not feeling your verses too much.
Saying "thought we were friends til the beginning to the end" makes it sound like some Christina Aguilera shit.
I'll battle you when i'm not so tired.
I have a couple on the official battles thread if you want to take a look.

 

[deadzone]

Lol , havent seen anyone else's and im not a rapper myself... but to be honest it is severely lacking, and i think you think your better than what you really are. just one man's opinion ,

 

[Ryan]

Ehh, i'm not feeling your verses too much.
Saying "thought we were friends til the beginning to the end" makes it sound like some Christina Aguilera shit.
I'll battle you when i'm not so tired.
I have a couple on the official battles thread if you want to take a look.

That verse was written for a friend, not for me. I was writing for her.

Lol , havent seen anyone else's and im not a rapper myself... but to be honest it is severely lacking, and i think you think your better than what you really are. just one man's opinion ,

What's it lacking? Flow? I don't know what to change if you don't tell me.

 

[deadzone]

That verse was written for a friend, not for me. I was writing for her.



What's it lacking? Flow? I don't know what to change if you don't tell me.

Yeah the flow of it (as how i would interpuret (sp?) just dont go right. I know raps dont have to and a lot of times dont have many but i think you should put a few rhyme's in it at points. Not really sure if that would help or not just an idea.

 

[Merchant Millz]

I got rp'ed

 

[YAHHH]

Nice work, try making a profession of it?

 

[letzgokill]

these poems all have a good idea to it. but the sentence flow and rhythm isn't clear and smooth, in feelings and behind my back.
I like runnin' the most, kind of funny and great flow.
overall, nice work

 

[Angelgrinder]

Meh...

 

[NatalieF]

some stuff doesn't rhyme... but it's still pretty good, i like ur ideas n stories. do u rap on real life experience? keep up the good work

 

[Xjaa]

Wow, the Luke[faggot] rap is actually very good.