Poem i wrote when i was 12

[Sexy Mario]

I wrote this poem when my mom died when i was 12.

Gone Just for Little While

I'm gone for a little while don't shed any tears
Im with you in spirit and will be with you for all your years.

I taught you every thing you need to know
to get through life it soon will show.

Just follow the path and live your life right
You will grow to a person that can love and not fight.

I'll see you soon so you don't need to cry
We can hug and kiss and I'll teach you to fly.

Please do not start this as a debate about Christianity. I am christian and proud of it. If you start a debate it will be reported as spam thank you.

 

[Fatih]

I wrote this poem when my mom died when i was 12.

Gone Just for Little While

I'm gone for a little while don't shed any tears
Im with you in spirit and will be with you for all your years.

I taught you every thing you need to know
to get through life it soon will show.

Just follow the path and live your life right
You will grow to a person that can love and not fight.

I'll see you soon so you don't need to cry
We can hug and kiss and I'll teach you to fly.

Please do not start this as a debate about Christianity. I am christian and proud of it. If you start a debate it will be reported as spam thank you.

Goodjob! Sorry for your loss.

 

[Lordhooters]

Very good.
Touching and relatable.

 

[Icedog726]

Dude that poem was amazing man

 

[Beat me DoWn]

I'm sorry that your mom died. Great Poem though. Very Heartfelt.

 

[Omfg1234]

Nice poem, sorry about your mom dying.

 

[hiway_2_hell]

im very sorry. but i have to say thats a very nice poem

 

[Sexy Mario]

Thanks guys.

 

[cain121]

Very good i felt your death almost! 10/10

 

[Harker]

I can feel it...
This is amazing, true emotion written through words

 

[Mr SJE]

Very moving poem, i don't understand how this relates to christianity?
Edit: Don't report me for spam, i just don't understand what the bottom part means?

 

[johnty15]

great poem especialy if you wrote it when you where 12 and sorry

 

[sliced]

Good poem for 12! r.i.p

 

[Arya]

It's good for a 12 year old.
I didn't feel the emotion, though.

 

[ccanax]

I wrote this poem when my mom died when i was 12.

Gone Just for Little While

I'm gone for a little while don't shed any tears
Im with you in spirit and will be with you for all your years.

I taught you every thing you need to know
to get through life it soon will show.

Just follow the path and live your life right
You will grow to a person that can love and not fight.

I'll see you soon so you don't need to cry
We can hug and kiss and I'll teach you to fly.

Please do not start this as a debate about Christianity. I am christian and proud of it. If you start a debate it will be reported as spam thank you.

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U r a real champ....nice rhythm
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Contract Hire

 

[loving_spec]

nice poem, and sorry =\

 

[sabbrinak55]

Good poem,i am very sorry about your mom dying.

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Lanzarote

 

[SeaJae]

Its a good thought, as a person I thought it was great.
As an experienced writer, I'd say it needs some work. I'm sure you don't care much for an in-depth analysis, since that more than likely wasn't the whole point of the writing piece.

 

[AmF]

I wrote this poem when my mom died when i was 12.

I'll see you soon so you don't need to cry
We can hug and kiss and I'll teach you to fly.

You can hug and kiss? This poem is about your mom, so I find that gross.

Not trying to be rude, and I am sorry for the loss of your mother.