Need an honest critique

Trying to tie all the elements together, and something just seems to be missing:



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I'm honestly not sure what. Maybe some more advanced lighting effects? Idk.

Any help would be much appreciated. Thanks!

 

Wow, looks amazing. Maybe a bit some light yeah.

 

this looks a lot like the sig that kina is auctioning :O

no i think the lighting is good, looks better like this in the dark. maybe just make it slightly brighter though

 

Don't look that much alike really. Not what I was going for at least.
Thanks for the critiques so far. I'll try to whip up a new version in a sec w/ more saturation on the letters

 

idk when i saw it i just thought of that sig :S

 

can u add like neon light from the inside? purple neaon light like a streak

 

Looks relatively good! Tho the brushes in the background kinda fight with it.. They don't blend that well..
Also; try to get some lighting in there, now it's kinda dark and dull, make it "BOOM" out more.

 

I like the darkness of it, I think it would lend itself to some really nice fluorescent pink highlights, just streaks along the inside rim of the letters.

Also, the 'i' needs some attention. I think the highlights will give it the pop you're looking for.

 

thats what i was trying to say in my post just didnt have the words for it lol

 

Obvious changes to make this into a more professional work:

The spacing is nice, but you'll have to make sure that text doesn't run through each other. Your dotted "I" needs to not have the dot run down through the lower piece. Use Photoshop to correct The "S" running through your "I", as well as the "R" running through your "E", and things will look much nicer.

Additionally, consider not allowing the outer material any "plastic" or "metalic" effects. It would look loads better if it looked like stone, but you've got a shine effect running the top of your text that doesn't belong unless there's a piece of glass running along the facing of the text [including over the stone.]

Most of the brushing works with this text idea, as the technical style is almost "construction" themed. I like the color. The circle, however, behind the back could be replaced with, say, a crane. Put a dump truck up front. Go toward the look of today's Ford "F-Series" advertisements and you'd polish this up just as it looks like it should.

P.S.: For the sake of validity, I only used Photoshop to make the "3D" effects on my current signature. No stock images, and only stock fonts were used.

 

Thanks everyone!

Tried to add more dynamic brushes, better lighting, and more discrete color

 

Seems like the texture on the text doesn't lend itself to give that shine, but if for some reason it did, you should have lens flare.

 

I quite like the first one. The texture within the text is awesome! Feel free to make me one similar to it

 

the lighting on the left side of the second one seems right but the really bright dot on the right side doesn't look like it should be there

 

i would like the very 1st one.

 

this one pretty good

 

Looks pretty awesome, Needs something added just not sure what