Near Death

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Near Death
  1. Unread #1 - Feb 6, 2009 at 2:38 AM
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    Near Death

    Interpret any way you please.

    Time goes on options thinning out
    Nothing to live on but remorse and doubt
    Down is the only place to go
    Life so short it's almost over
    A flash of light approaches
    It's almost over
    It's almost over
    But it's not time today
    Another time
    Another way
    Relief flows through the body
    An eerie crown is placed on thee
    A sense so real so close like belief
    Todays not the day
    Another time
    Another way
     
  3. Unread #2 - Feb 6, 2009 at 3:31 AM
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    Near Death

    i enjoyed it :) good work
     
  5. Unread #3 - Mar 4, 2009 at 2:11 PM
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    Near Death

    Not bad, but I think you can add more feeling/emotion to it.

    "An eerie crown is placed on thee"
    What do you mean by this?
     
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