My first rap verse

[nkoth]

Tell me what you think, thanks.

Flash from heaven made it all begin,
flash from hell and it could all end.
Lifes a gamble put all my chips in,
so crazy got your mind flipping,
madness like I'm acid tripping,
or chill like I'm syrup sippin.
Beat ya ass get on all 4s like children.
Possibly crippling,
from all the clips I put in.
Keep continuing, never gonna end,
a task too big for just 1 man,
maybe we could all lend a hand,
possibly an enemy or another fan,
from a brother or a girl named Pam.
But I must incist on foccusing on the task at hand,
and that is the employees of uncle sam.
The goverment blinds you with Its scams,
when all they really doing is just hurting the fams,
the American dream is just another sham,
they slaughter the innocence like a white lamb.
Now people all evil and cuthroats alike,
but music trys to bring the truth through the mic.

 

[jerbear]

nice lol

 

[nkoth]

Thanks i was high as shit when i wrote it, its not that great.

 

[0 w n t z]

Not to criticize but doubt you could write this when your high unless your not totally stoned...sounds good to me... But putting a random name in it like Pam is weird.