Writing Help

[Saint Grimm]

So, I'm writing a fantasy novel. Its meant to be very gory and has a lot of violence.

I currently have the story planned to be separated into 4 parts, each part taking place some amount of years after the last, for example where the last chapter of Part 1 ends, there is 10 years that are vaguely explained at the first of the first chapter of Part 2.

I am nearing the end of Part 2 and I've noticed that its very different from part 1.

Part 1 describes the lands and the people as the "hero" travels them with a good number of battles as he fights as a general in a war. (not modern style, sword&shield type battles.) But I've found that in Part 2, the hero doesn't do near as much traveling. I'm not really sure how I can explain this so it doesn't ruin any of the story for people on here that are going to read it...

In the first part, like I said there is a lot of traveling through the land, in the second part the hero travels to just 1 destination and fights enemy after enemy after enemy within this one location. The only traveling he does is between rooms in this area to find his next enemy. I feel that the book might be taking an "anime" turn in Part 2 (thats the best way I can think to describe it). Would a lot of readers find this a problem? If so, how should I go about changing it around? Should he be traveling around finding these enemies in different locations instead of all waiting for him in a dungeon-style area?

I've considered placing the enemies in different places, or attacking him in his travels, but that would require deleting and re-writing almost 15k words. Is there any other way? If most people think it wouldn't be a "slow" or unenjoyable read to keep the story how it is, I don't mind. But if it seems like just killing and killing and more killing with nothing else will make the story boring through part 2, I need to find some way to change that.

Any advice is appreciated.

 

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[ssarekcuf]

Well, take a look at the Harry Potter movies/books. The first couple of books took place briefly at his muggle home, then the rest was at Hogwarts. Now look at the last couple of books (ESPECIALLY the last one) and look at how much they travel. They go to the Ministry of Magic, the forest, exc. I honestly think it's a good thing the two parts are different in that aspect. As long as you keep the same characters, same general idea, then readers won't notice any substantial change between the parts. If anything, it will be a refresher because it won't be a direct repeat of the last part. Instead of getting brief descriptions of the places he goes to, the second part will really narrow down on one specific area. I think it's fine as it is man.

 

[Saint Grimm]

Well, take a look at the Harry Potter movies/books. The first couple of books took place briefly at his muggle home, then the rest was at Hogwarts. Now look at the last couple of books (ESPECIALLY the last one) and look at how much they travel. They go to the Ministry of Magic, the forest, exc. I honestly think it's a good thing the two parts are different in that aspect. As long as you keep the same characters, same general idea, then readers won't notice any substantial change between the parts. If anything, it will be a refresher because it won't be a direct repeat of the last part. Instead of getting brief descriptions of the places he goes to, the second part will really narrow down on one specific area. I think it's fine as it is man.

Thanks for the advice! I think I will at least go back during revisions and add more detail of the location hes in. maybe add something more between enemies other than just doors. I like it how it is personally, but I think it needs a slight bit more to catch the attention of other people. But at least you've helped me decide to just add a bit more detail and over all space to this location. It'll be a lot easier than rewriting the entire part

 

[ThenoisyJaguar]

Part 2 doesn't need to look like part 1 in that sense. It's common to find stories that start with much traveling and are continued with a part that takes place with much less traveling. It just means that you are getting to the point and cutting the filler out. If staying in one place adds to the story, keep it.

 

[Saint Grimm]

yes, theres almost no filler at all after he gets to the said area and the only description is of fighting, blood, gore, stuff like that. I do plan on adding some filler when I go through and revise it and add things to make it reach a specific word count. I plan on having no less than 100k words and almost done with the last chapter of part 2 only have 40k words.