This ones called, "Mary-Go Round".

[Arya]

Read it emotionless-ly. (So you can get the rhythm.)

Have you ever been to my hell?
If so, you could probably tell,
That so much blood had been splattered,
So many emotions, battered.
Careful how you make your choices!
If you listened, you'd hear voices.
Of the already deceased.
Tortured souls, not yet released.
I have nothing more to give.
I am a lesson for your kids.
If they dared turn out like me,
Their soul, you'd probably see,
Sinking through the ground,
To my hell in a fiery mary-go round.

 

[cain121]

very well going. Luv it.

 

[JIM TIM JOHN]

Very nice. Keep in mind not every line has to rhyme in a good song.

 

[canada pwnz]

hey keep up the good work

 

[Arya]

Thanks.

Yeah, I know. I just like the challenge of creating something that not only rhymes but has emotion to it. It's more complex than simply putting emotion into it or making it rhyme.

 

[Pure_Evil]

I like it. It's extremely catchy, lol.

 

[Little Miss Piggy]

it's ok...