Think this fits? ( Rap )

[Public Enemy Number One]

I think I've got it all figured out, thanks guys.

 

[Larsiny_family]

I’m so fly I’ll hop out this plane, not fuck with my chute

^ pretty good line but i have the best "fly" lines

 

[Chase]

I'm taking this beat:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z2xBkD8Y1bM

And doing a collab with one of my friends.
The lyrics...

Starts at 1:01
Little city of King, but we're making big noise
16,17 year old kids that run with the big boys
Can't handle UNC, or Carolina backstreets,
But bro we goin' loud when we pick up our heat
Cause we're Carolina proud, smoking carolina loud,
And at my parties only the baddest bitches allowed.
Burnin' green, staying clean, King cops always watchin' me
But we just say fuck it, roll a joint and let it be.
Ends at 1:26

Starts at 1:50
B.I.G. in this bitch, call us verbal intimidation
Money stacked up on my table, looks like mad inflation
Playing with this track like a Mac Miller imitation
But know that I’ll beat on your door, doesn’t matter the situation
Million dollar suit on, toss my snapback on to boot
I’m so fly I’ll hop out this plane, not fuck with my chute
Hit the ground, push this tape to try to get some loot
So many haters, can’t decide which ones I’mma have to shoot
Ends at 2:15

Two 25 second parts, I have a VERY rough recording of both parts but they were done playing the music through my laptop, and recording it on my phone. Just trying to get an opinion on the overall quality of the lyrics, and if the beat is appropriate.

It'll fit depending on your flow. What I do to make sure lyrics fit in songs, are when i'm writing, I just turn the beat on repeat, and then freestyle. Get a feel for the beat, a feel for your flow. When freestyling if you say a bar or so you like that sounds nice, write it down, and go from there by just keep repeating that bar or so until a new idea or bar forms, and so on until you are finished, piecing them all together. That's how i get my flow & lyrics to fit the beat.

Any questions or if you just want to chat and exchange songs, PM me.

 

[kingbillaz]

i jsut rapped the verse to this beat the beat is appropiate for this also the lyrics are ok. id have to say the 2nd verse is the best

 

[Realsies]

you need multis bro...you're structure is good, but your lines aren't...

It will probably fit in the beat if you flow over it right, but tbh...write something better...

 

[Public Enemy Number One]

Realsies, so far everyone I've spit this for loved it and thought the lyrics were sick. I'm always thinking of ways to improve so if there's a section I can work on to make it come together a little better ( lol that rhymed. ) I'll do it.

 

[kingbillaz]

which of the verses are yours? like which is your boys and which is yours