Sickest shit I've ever written

100% me


If you got a piece you better be quick on the draw/
Put you to sleep when the hollow point slip through your jaw/
Leave you on a ventilator while you sip through a straw/
My Flow give you salmonella cuz I spit it so raw/

Slayin these amateurs with a flow past legendary/
Colder than Alaska in the middle of January/
I'm plottin your death as you're sitting there sedentary/
Slaughter your relatives like the beef was hereditary/

Exterminating your family when I decapitate your kin/
Desecrating your vanity when I lacerate your skin/
Illustrating my insanity that's cultivating within/
And orchestrate a calamity that's devastatingly grim/
I'll Coordinate a tragedy and Incinerate your men/
I'll Mutilate your anatomy and amputate your limbs/
I'll Assassinate you candidly to validate your end/
Til you're a coagulating casualty disintegrating in the wind/
^raw

 

lacks a good flow, words are put simply just to rhyme, and sophisticated words don't make a rap sound cooler.
Thumbs Down.

 

Exterminate your family, decapitating your kin/
Desecrating your vanity when I lacerate your skin/
Illustrating my insanity cultivating within/
And orchestrate calamity that's devastatingly grim/
Coordinate a tragedy and Incinerate your men/
I'll Mutilate your anatomy and amputate your limbs/
I'll Assassinate you candidly to validate your end/
coagulating casualty, dissipate in the wind/

^Fixed
Flows perfectly, 15 syllables per line
You have no idea how hard it is to use this many multis and have it still make sense AND be clever AND flow at the same time.

 

Are you white?

 

http://www.sythe.org/showthread.php?t=1390741

 

lol, why?