poetry

[stui]

hey all i mdoing some poetry for a school assignment due tomorrow and was wondering about a couple of things

Feels like I’m falling, falling further down (why is alliteration used here)
Can hear a voice call to me. “Don't turn around soldier, don't turn around!”
But once your mind's taken, once you’re full on track,
No mortal word spoken could ever pull you back.

For I came here to fight,
I came here to kill,
Pull up a flag on the top of a hill.
Cut through the wires, crawl through the mud,
Wade through oiled rivers of fallen blood.
Creep through the trenches,
Slit my palms on the stone,
Put my arms round their shoulders,
Feel my blade grate their bones, (assonence)
Like a black cat at night I'll steal the chicks from the nest
Work hard for the medals they’ll pin to my chest.
Yes, we'll pray with the few at the end of the day,
And bury our 'cold ones', who once had some say,
For I came here to fight,
I came here to kill.
But I guess this wasn’t God's will.

And now I feel like I’m falling,
Falling further down. (and repition of the start here
Can hear a voice call to me,
“Come around soldier! Come around!”
But once your soul's taken, once you’re on that track,
No mortal word spoken could ever pull you back.


Thanks in advance to anyone that can help

 

[wackywamba]

Feels like I’m falling, falling further down

The repetition of the sound of the 'f' in the first syllable is alliteration.

Feel my blade grate their bones

Assonance, is the repetition of vowel sounds. Try pronouncing just the bold bits, it's putting emphasis on each of the words.

As for the repetition - the poem is about a soldier going to war with these high hopes of being the victor. The introduction is providing the context of war, while the concluding verse is providing some cynical irony in the fact that he's busy dying in the war.

 

[stui]

thanks wacky, one thing though i knew what Assonence and Aliteration are i just needed to know why they were used

 

[wackywamba]

Both of these techniques are used to stress certain lines.

"I feel like I’m falling,
Falling further down"

Is repeated twice, the alliteration brings it to the readers attention that it's being repeated as it emphasizes the individual lines.

"Feel my blade grate their bones"

Is more to stir an emotional response. The assonance provides the reader with a hard hitting line that will likely cause some form of visualization.

 

[stui]

THANK YOU SO MUCH JUST SAVED ME FROM AN E- To probs a B+ or A-