Poetry help =/

[Lefty RC]

thanks

 

[oblivion9032]

very good poem! the only thing i would change would be to change different to differ and change fait to fate

 

[Weasel2013]

I'm currently in the "oh so fun poetry unit" in my English class, and I'm horrible with poetry
this is the rough draft of the poem im currently working on.
If you know your poetry and can give me some good advice/poetry techniques Id really appreciate it!

No matter how long I try
No matter how long I wait
we'll never understand you
Its our undeniable fait
exploding with colors
like an ancient Van Gogh
all I see is white
where ever I go
You are the creator of life
The destroyer of essence
The defyer of god
a disputable reference
Your many brothers and sisters
Differnt in every way
Your play ground is endless
but you're stuck where you lay
your flares make you painless
but will be the end of you soon
your remains will again prosper
like a hatching cacoon
and all I can do
is let my mind wonder
over a subject
thats makes everyone ponder

Thanks!
Any adivice will be helpfull!

Fait = Fate
Differnt= Different
cacoon = cocoon
defyer = def


Make the above spelling corrections, and your poem looks great! :laugh:

 

[Lefty RC]

Thanks for finding the spelling mistakes =]