My Raps. Lame, Just Rate Please.

[lacuna]

Hey, i'v just been bored and makin up some raps. There lame as shit but tell me what you think. Yea, there short, but just tell me if u think i got any hope. lmfao thanks. Tell me what you think, no hard feelings.

It's like, I typed really black. Just to make it sound more legit =D lmao

(How I shoot)


first of all, i aim my shit
down yo momma back, to da spine i hit

she cry, she whine
she wish that i would die

i can not stop
till i hit the top
its about time

its all about where i shoot my shit
i aim it at yoe momma
to the ground she hit

then i run, i cut
then i feel my gut

turn, ache and grind
then i look behind wishin i culd just
REWIND


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Runnin from the five o'



five o' five o'
after me cuzz uh hoe

she snitched, at nothin
i run cuz im bluffin

when i see the cops
my speed turns to the top

i can run so fast
niggas cant even see my path

got me scared
got me paranoid

thinkin that i enjoyed

the rush, the run
hope u havin fun

when im out
imma kill ya hun

now whos havin fun


There lame, but thanks. lmao


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lmao wow this shit is sad. Im just gottin shit down. Bored as hell


Ah ha

here we go


Bitch if u fuck with me
my people wont let u be

nigga u got me fucked up
in the head

ill leave yo ass bloody red

on the street
check me out

nigga thats without a doubt

u cant even blame me
better be ashamed of me
I find
yoe house

lift up
momma's blouse

eat her shit
it was lit

Yea, her clit

then i shot a bitch

cut out that crib
i shot her rib

next thing i no
that bitch called a poe

cause ill kill a bitch
make her twitch

u think im playin hoe
Bitch YOU AINT FUCKIN NO
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You can help me out if you want, im workin on this right now







i destroy the compotition when i spit
just listen

when i rhyme
shit i do all the time

thinkin its a joke
till yoe bitch ass choke

choke croke
like it when you smoke

cause yoe raps in jank
vodka, fill up my tank

yoe shit is dead and outdated

mines all the way to the top.
and high rated
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[B-NeezY]

That was lame no lie, you wasted so many bars on blank shots.

 

[I Pain I]

Keep on working on your raps, Keep on practicing.
Practice and you'll get better

 

[rx8]

That was corny as hell no lie.

 

[I3laze]

bro, try keep every 4 bars having 9-14 syllables in them, you will find they work ALOT better.