I have to agree. I can see it was intentionally done but I don't think it looks quite right.
Other then that the c4d stuff is nice, but for the text I feel the lighting is a bit meh considering it is so blocky and white and then it immediately disappears. I'm far from a wizard with lighting though so I can't really offer advice on how to fix that in your lightroom.
^This
It looks really good except for at the bottom it just cuts off and looks like not much time was spent on the bottom piece, Add some extra stars or something around it.