My little rap!

[IKillYou]

I'm amazed at my blaze
from this purple sticky haze.
You better watch out cause'
I'll put you in your place.
Watch what you say
cause' i'm skuxx deluxe and im gunna rep it out,
walkin round town reppin beeez up....
What up on the marty streets
Running on my feet from the po-lice.
cause' I'm bored all the time,
committing all the crime,
tryna make a dime fuckin all the bitches in a line.
Now this was my story don't ever ignore me cause'
I'll put you on your ass takin all the glory

Comment and rate 1 - 10

 

[iDesignLogos]

I like it

I don't listen to rap but reading lyrics can be interesting.

 

[nautiiquan]

it wack lol

 

[Gorgankle]

I'm amazed at your rhymes
they speak of good times
like smokin da dank buds
and soakin in the suds
Nautiiquan is hatin
cause you ain't fakin
but I say fuck his ass
I'll turn his face to a black mass
For dissin on your game
Cause homie you'll earn fame
just don't turn lame
check it Gorgankle just Came

 

[boss_deejay]

why about drugs lol. but nnice how long it take u to think of that ?

 

[IKillYou]

Just done a bit every day

 

[eFSko^]

I'm amazed at your rhymes
they speak of good times
like smokin da dank buds
and soakin in the suds
Nautiiquan is hatin
cause you ain't fakin
but I say fuck his ass
I'll turn his face to a black mass
For dissin on your game
Cause homie you'll earn fame
just don't turn lame
check it Gorgankle just Came

Soakin in the suds? Haha, like OP's more.

 

[loving_spec]

very nice, u wrote this in 1 day ?

 

[xPHOBIAx]

Kinda short but yeah it's aight

 

[Ryan]

You're 12 and part of the reason people hate rap.

"committing all the crime,
tryna make a dime fuckin all the bitches in a line."

No.
​

 

[Surround Sound]

8

It's pretty good actually, better than I could do.

Agreeing with Ryan, try to replace the fuckin all the bitches line.

 

[tofurocks]

You're 12 and part of the reason people hate rap.

"committing all the crime,
tryna make a dime fuckin all the bitches in a line."

No.
​

I have to agree with Ryan, the lyrics are stale and the flow seems poor.

 

[IKillYou]

I don't mind that you don't like it, but why would you think I'm twelve?

 

[The_Ohner]

I think it's alright, get the haters off your back.

 

Hey man if you enjoy what you're doing, more power to ya
3/10 for lyrics though