• Log in or sign up for an account here: https://www.sythe.org/login

my first freestyle !

How good was I?

  • hot

    Votes: 0 0.0%
  • your ok

    Votes: 3 33.3%
  • suck

    Votes: 1 11.1%
  • suck ass

    Votes: 5 55.6%

  • Total voters
    9

Rhino

Guru
Joined
Nov 1, 2007
Sythe Gold
0
Messages
1,406
Location
Cincinnati,Ohio
heres teh link


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=781689


waring lil wayne style freestyle



here are my lyrics and yes i made both my beats via fruity loops :P

my flow so hard,you cant break it,sorta like a yellow diamond bracelet
So many bars feelin like a jail cell
more doe in my brown paper than bakers sale,
more doe than strawberry shortcake,
im bakin cakes,iced out cakes im so cold.
so much ice you can call me subzero,
rappin n out the beat like a rapist,im da new hip hop hero
im fellin like hip hop freshmen,im new,im raw i rock,im da boss,now hiring,nw employees if ya-
hate me then fuck you "no vasaline"
wana bang then meet my ay kay,
47 or my 48 magnum, ya hear da clickin n clackin like ball point pen,
back to the work i gota sell my bricks,
i aint talkin consrtution im talkin real shit,
i spit freestyes of da dome like a brain cell,
a tumor,nota rumor bitch im hard,money too long teachers whip outthe rulers.
I spit hard like a burning throught,
hock a luge,call it my burin flow,like jungle fever,
i spit alot like im dehidrated,
AHH shit im feelin a lil deconstapded.

Yahhh digg

rate /10

thnx :P also post how i can improve.
 
Its ok, but try to talk little faster
 
A: the beat sucks
B: your style stinks
C: talk louder
D: rap about what you truly mess with
E: A for effort

rap = 6/10
 
5/10 You need to deliver the punchlines, even if you can't rap you can perform it well... (Example= Lil John)
 
put more vocal into it.. speed it up and get agressive dood..
 
No... sounds like you are just reading it off the paper
 
not bad, i would make my own beats using an actual synthesiser/keyboard and sequence it using a better prog like cubase, also your not putting yourself in it your just talking, one negative comment, i dont like that gun cocking sound every 2 secs. other than that is was ok, 7/10
 
Wanna audio battle?
 
THis isn't an actual "FREESTYLE". It sounds more like "reading of a peice of paper". Also, that's a shit song. Choose a better beat. 5/10 for the effort.
 
A: the beat sucks
B: your style stinks
C: talk louder
D: rap about what you truly mess with
E: A for effort

rap = 6/10


I'd agree with most of this, but who says you need to rap about what you truly mess with?

Many rappers rap about how hard the life is in the "hood" while they live in extremely luxurious mansions.

~Tumma.
 
umm honestly I think the beat was HORRIBLE, next time use an instrumental from a professional like 9th Wonder, Premo, or Pete rock.

the lyrics were decent but you should work on your pronunciation and your flow, cos during certain parts you were terribly off beat.

stay up, kid
 
Runescape Gamblingrunescape gambling
Back
Top