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and tomorrow go give it your best for the retest
man you gotta give it your all
and remember, what caused your previous fall
avoid that mistake because if you don't,
life has not another retake, cherish it
it's gone it's gone, it's dawn it's dawn,
time to wake up and get your lazy butt awoken
for if you miss it, kiss it,
goodbye.
i did it again, three fucking times
in all i have failed, failed to survive,
the pain and agony, i gave up
time and time again, i'm drained
for now i really dont know what to do,
im without a compass, lost in direction,
like a man stranded in a jungle with no navigation,
an unknown particle in the universe.
right in front of me is an open sea,
it's like im just a size of a pea, negligible.
so tell me please, where do i head for?
or at least, give me a hint of what's ahead of,
no don't get me mistaken, my dreams will never be forsaken,
and i ain't here to seek comfort or pity,
i'm not your usual pussy kitty.
Please give me your feedback and how you think i can edit it to improve it. I don't know whether this is a poem or a rap maybe both
I thought it was pretty decent myself.
man you gotta give it your all
and remember, what caused your previous fall
avoid that mistake because if you don't,
life has not another retake, cherish it
it's gone it's gone, it's dawn it's dawn,
time to wake up and get your lazy butt awoken
for if you miss it, kiss it,
goodbye.
i did it again, three fucking times
in all i have failed, failed to survive,
the pain and agony, i gave up
time and time again, i'm drained
for now i really dont know what to do,
im without a compass, lost in direction,
like a man stranded in a jungle with no navigation,
an unknown particle in the universe.
right in front of me is an open sea,
it's like im just a size of a pea, negligible.
so tell me please, where do i head for?
or at least, give me a hint of what's ahead of,
no don't get me mistaken, my dreams will never be forsaken,
and i ain't here to seek comfort or pity,
i'm not your usual pussy kitty.
Please give me your feedback and how you think i can edit it to improve it. I don't know whether this is a poem or a rap maybe both
I thought it was pretty decent myself.


