Hot Mess

[Hello my name is]

Got outta bed ha girl your hairs messy
Its sunday mornin, goin to church so get dressy
Last night was the hottest shit in a long time
So heres a ciggerette, yeah have one of mine

Damn girl i love the way we went for hours we were never done
Fuck we took no break, and we made heat like the sun
Causin friction makin hot shit com quick
Cuz i love the way you be ridin that d**k
And i love the way you call me perfect and you love me lots
So heres a lil bit of a freestyle, to tell you that your hot
Your a 10 im so damn lucky to have you here
and i wont never fuck this up, so dont you fear
Because your voice is all i wanna hear, when i steer
This car straight down broadway i mean it sincere
.... i love you

 

[lacuna]

nice....lol

 

[baconpl0x]

lol not bad man

 

[caseyscoolerthanu]

And i love the way you call me perfect and you love me lots
So heres a lil bit of a freestyle, to tell you that your hot


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That line just doesnt work, "love me lots" just seems too artificial and lovey dovey *Not the picture you want to convey into listeners heads im sure* and on the second line...where it says "to tell you that your hot" is just a bland adjective.

Overall its a pretty good composition of lyrics and flow, just change those 2 lines, in my opinion, that don't work. ^_^

8/10