grammar nazis! (this message isn\'t spam...)

Yo, so I\'m trying to type out a sales pitch for the World Society for the Protection of Animals... I have my interview in only a few hours and I still have work to do! Normally I\'d post this in personal but no-one lurks there and like I said I have no time... , spam away I know it\'s a weird thing to post here.

Is this question grammatically correct and am I using the right words?

I\'m sure this is correct, but I need less words on the pitch grr>_>
The reason we ask people to use their credit card is it\'s administratively less complicated.

 

Stopped after THE

 

ugh I fucked up the quote tags and can\'t edit my posts with this computer >_>.

 

tl;dr