FIGHT! freestyle

Call the boys cos im in trouble,
in minutes the gang can see the numbers double,
we ask them to fight but yea they buckle.
dey pull out their glocks n aim for the dome
gutta keep our heads up cos we aint at home
we walk back slowly and run for cover
they shoot the one we call our brother
the war has begun and we havnt noticed
pull out our guns and keep in focus !

 

Its not bad but you should use proper grammar and get lines between the phrases.

 

Freestyle is the only thing I can deal with that has indecent grammar.
But I tried out these lyrics just now and they're pretty good.
You can find a beat very easily in this.

If I had to rate this, I would say 9/10. Very good man.