Well, the use of C4Ds is nice but you should really experiment with a less c4d spammy style.
But back on topic:
The lighting is nice, but it's off a little bit. You have the light coming from the background but it is on the render coming from the foreground. The render is centered, which is a really bad pet peeve of mine. You don't need it center because when it is center you are hitting the power points in the rules of the third.