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Boy in Ohio grows a 'Caffeine Baby'!

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It's a nice article, but you shouldn't start out with "as you know" because that right there deters a third of your readers who instantly think "no, I didn't know that" and they'll feel like they're missing out on something. That makes them not want to read on, etc

Keep writing yo
 
Well written article, almost like a professional wrote it!

Keep writing, how old are you? Your writing is really good.
 
Thanks for the feedback.

I'm 17 to answer your previous question.

Thanks for the advice, just did a little writing because I'm bored.
 
This is a pretty well-written article. It seems a little colloquial at times though in places, for example "it feeds on nutrients in the blood, it literally cannot live without its carrier", but on a whole it seemed like something strange enough to be in a newspaper and be shared with family/friends.
 
Thanks, yeah its the first article I wrote.

Just got told about the site and decided to try it out :).
 
Dude is this real???
 
No, it's not real.
 
Nope, just an article I wrote out of boredom.

Flashy title + Fake believable story = Good Readership.
 
Well done, you actually had me going there and I was kind of scared because I probably drink more then 10 caffeinated drinks a day. x)

You should write short stories. I'd read them.
 
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