Blunts.

[Promethazine]

Let me know what you think?

Non stop blunts, one after another
I got these lightweights, beggin for their mother
Yeah we smoke trees, and we pass 'em to eachother
We roll with swisha sweets, nigga none other
I only get the goods man, I don't fuck with reggie
That shits nasty, it makes me feel edgy
I got the whole click with me, nigga you know
We ridin down the street, smoke out the window
They drop a beat, and I spit my flow
I can't stop, I just let it go
call that premature or whatever you like
Don't give a fuck, you still ridin' a bike
We swing by McDonald's, then to CMart to hit up my nigga Ronald
Get some more swishas and roll another blunt, then go on a hunt
To cure my munchies that I got inside, I don't wanna stop
Let's take another ride
I keep driftin, I keep shiftin, Don't give a fuck, bitch stop trippin
Pass that blunt, let me get another hit
I don't know what I'm saying, I'm just too fuckin lit.

 

[ICwalk]

need's work on your wordplay bro

 

[Chase]

Yeah I agree with need more work on wordplay, also work on the rhyming a little bit, some bits don't rhyme.

 

[Promethazine]

need's work on your wordplay bro

Yeah I agree with need more work on wordplay, also work on the rhyming a little bit, some bits don't rhyme.

Could either of you elaborate a bit more? And I don't really see anywhere that doesn't have a rhyme? And not every line has to rhyme, at least in my opinion, but if you think differently please do say so.

 

[ICwalk]

When you use either common phrases or commonly used to defintions and twist them to fit what your saying for example a line from fabolous: "my homie told me keep it coming like a horny bitches". Coz horny bitches cum and keep it coming...so keeping making music as much as a horny bitch cums.

ANOTHER EXAMPLE from the one and only LOSO:

"I mean what i say like the dicitionary.
I dont write rhymes, i write obituaries"

^^^^ was off google.

But you need to include more punchlines etc.

 

[Promethazine]

Alright, I'll work on that. Like I said, my metaphors are at a low and I'm slowly stocking up to see what I can put in. Thanks for the input.

 

[K1NGM4GE]

i bet your mom would be proud imagine if she read that loooooool