I don't think the text is too bright at all, it's eye catching yet not hurting the eyes.
The effects on the other hand seem over-killed in this one, way too much going on with all the light work.
The color scheme stays constant so that's a plus, but you've got a lot of fractles that aren't needed try cutting down on those and experiment with different ways on how to use them.
Keep them coming mate, they're looking better.
zippy who made yours :O ?

