another short verse

[SmokeBudPVPyou]

im sittin here freestylin' from tha seat of my pants,
lookin down on you wannabes lookin like a million ants,
Im bout to stomp on your colony, and clean you out,
and when im done you'll be screamin its another drought!,
cuz when i come thru i murder it all,
ill take your girl, take your connect, even the pictures on the wall,
cuz im tryna survive it all makin bread on these streets tryna ball,
so just give me a phone call, you know ill pick up,
ill throw the weight in the back of the pickup truck,
distributin green to your town so reverse that frown,
hit a blunt get high and lets go downtown,
cuz when i hit the club, all the bitches be followin my swag,
sayin that they can smell my green chronic bag,
so they ask me hey D, can i get a g?,
Hell no bitch we up in the club, and all i fuck with is keys.
and if you see me on the streets, dont try and attack,
cuz ill spray the mack, leavin ur brains on the side of the cadillac.

 

[Dark Koed]

I liked how you made it all mostly rhyme 8/10

 

[lacuna]

Almost rhyme?

 

[baconpl0x]

not bad

 

[caseyscoolerthanu]

I give you a 7/10, just because it was entertaining to read, but you to work on some of your lyrics and flow.


All you fuck with is keys? does that even make sense?
Hell no bitch we up in the club, and all i fuck with is keys.
ok line
and if you see me on the streets, dont try and attack,
Websters Dictionairy . com definition for "Mack" = A Pimp. <<<--Does that really go with it?
cuz ill spray the mack, leavin ur brains on the side of the cadillac.