You really need to improve on perspective my friend. The angle of the text and how jumbled it looks can easily be fixed if you learn how to align and space out your letters properly.
Try to start making the text on an angle like you would be looking at it in front of you. Space out the letters so they don't overlap as much. The lighting and colours are decent but try to improve on making the graffiti font more legible.
What one are you talking about BGlave. Thank for the time you took to write some feedback. I'm assuming its the first one and i totally agree been a week since i did it and i hate it