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TOPIC: ‘US President Truman’s fear of communism was the main cause of the Cold War in Europe between 1945 and 1949.’ How far do you agree?

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&#8216;US President Truman&#8217;s fear of communism was the main cause of the Cold War in Europe between 1945 and 1949.&#8217; How far do you agree?
To answer the question successfully, you are expected to show knowledge and understanding of the causes of the Cold War in Europe from 1945-1949.  In order to reach a conclusion regarding the validity of the hypothesis, you must articulate numerous arguments about the origins of the Cold War.  The best responses will:
&#8226;	Be focused and balanced
&#8226;	Analyze/evaluate both the support and challenge cases
&#8226;	Reach a reasoned conclusion as to whether the hypothesis is to be supported or not.
To receive full credit, you will also have to mention the traditional, revisionist, and post-revisionist viewpoints throughout your essay (rather than casually mentioned in the last few lines).

Tips on how this essay needs to be written:

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&#61656;	Do NOT use first person phrases, such as &#8220;I think,&#8221; &#8220;I believe,&#8221; or &#8220;In my opinion.&#8221;  It sounds wishy-washy (not to mention the fact that no one really cares about your agenda.)  Write in third person.
&#61656;	Do NOT refer to the United States as &#8220;us&#8221; (unless it&#8217;s a capital &#8216;U&#8217; and &#8216;S&#8217;) or &#8220;we.&#8221;  (Your examiner will likely NOT be an American.)
&#61656;	Think before you begin writing your essay!  Make an outline and organize your thoughts.  Your intro will make it clear to your examiner whether or not you have done this.
&#61656;	Make sure everything included in your essay adds credence to your argument and helps you answer the posed question.  In other words, DO NOT include random information because you know it and hope it sticks.  
&#61656;	Do not casually mention miscellaneous facts. If you are going to introduce a topic, you must know something about it and be able to put it into the proper context.  Again, there must be a good reason for its presence in your essay (to add credence to your argument and help you answer the question).
&#61656;	Do not quote something unless you are sure you&#8217;re quoting it correctly.  Likewise, if you&#8217;re not going to quote directly (and instead choose to paraphrase), that&#8217;s fine&#8230;but don&#8217;t include quotations.
&#61656;	Chronological order isn&#8217;t always necessary; however if you are going to set up your essay in such a fashion, it needs to be accurate.  
&#61656;	Do not make your examiner guess what you know and what you don&#8217;t.  Sure, your examiner might know what you are trying to say or what you are implying&#8230;but if he/she is left to guess or &#8220;read into&#8221; your implications, you will get no marks for your &#8220;knowledge.&#8221;
&#61656;	Whenever possible, use a thematic approach to answering questions.  It is often much harder than chronology, but it shows the examiner that you&#8217;ve truly analyzed the question.
&#61656;	Finish your thoughts.  Don&#8217;t introduce something if you aren&#8217;t prepared to take it the whole nine yards.  Again, don&#8217;t make your examiner decide whether or not you know your stuff&#8230;because, inevitably, he/she will not decide in your favor.

How its graded:

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Each &#8220;part&#8221; of each essay is awarded a number from 1-3:
1=Satisfactory
2=Adequate (but could use improvement)
3=Unsatisfactory
The order in which the numbers are assigned are as follows:
First number = Introduction
Second number= Factual knowledge
Third number = Contextual knowledge
Fourth number = Conclusion
For example, a 2/1/3/2 means:
Adequate Introduction / Satisfactory Factual Knowledge / Unsatisfactory Contextual Knowledge / Adequate Conclusion

Here are some somewhat decent intros for one of my previous topics: Why did the Grand Alliance break down during the years 1945-1947?

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&#8220;The origins of the Grand Alliance can be traced back to WWI, but the Grand Alliance became a force to be reckoned with during WWII.  The threat of war was enough to help smooth over any conflicts that arose due to conflicting ideals but with the war ending in 1945, there was no force left to hold together the alliance.&#8221;
&#8220;During the years immediately following the Second World War, the tension between the members of the Grand Alliance grew substantially.  The main superpowers of the Alliance (United States and USSR) had very different plans for post-war Europe.&#8221;
&#8220;The Grand Alliance was held together during World War II because they had a common goal, which was to defeat Nazi Germany.  Once the Alliance was able to accomplish this, there was no longer interest between Britain, US, and USSR.&#8221;
&#8220;The Grand Alliance was an alliance between the United States, USSR, and Great Britain during WWII.  After the war, the two superpowers, USA and USSR, had different views as to how they planned on rehabilitating their military, government, and economy.  Different post-war ideologies split up the union of the Grand Alliance, further creating a bi-polar world.  The USSR supported communist regimes and had a mission to spread it throughout Europe.  The United States saw western capitalism as a better approach.  The superpowers no longer worked as one and had opposing plans for recovering from WWII.&#8221;

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