14 year old rapper

[Onebereal]

Not really a rapper, I just write things. This is the first thing I recorded, tell me what you think.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=27FEZdQooMw&context=C31052a2ADOEgsToPDskI87kV51S4bHgDxSqycZkiU

 

[x339]

I think the lyrics were good, but you don't really seem like you have a good voice for it. I suggest you keep writing and maybe your voice will get better as you mature and practice, but always keep writing even if the voice doesn't follow.

 

[kill dank]

It's not turrrible, but sounds more like poetry someone would turn in for a school assignment.

 

[Onebereal]

You don't have to say nigga or rap about money for it to be rap.

 

[kill dank]

You don't have to say nigga or rap about money for it to be rap.

Never said you did. You don't know me, but I don't like rap in general. The fact that I didn't completely shun you should be a good sign. =]

 

[Snatchmasta]

Just because you don't rap about pussy/money/weed doesn't make you a lyricist

 

[[S]eki]

Just because you don't rap about pussy/money/weed doesn't make you a lyricist

Infact, the best lyricist's rap about life, like Eminem.

 

[Gr4vity]

You have no flow imo.

 

[BedLover]

Yeah true i love eminem style.

 

[Chase]

I really like the lyrics, however you need to work on your flow and delivery some. Also need to develop your own style. If you did this, you'd be set.

 

[alec867]

i like the lyrics also, and yeah you gota work on some flow and work on your own sound

 

[SexayMistahBee]

Just because you don't rap about pussy/money/weed doesn't make you a lyricist

you don't define what makes a person a lyricist.

 

[pakadz]

The video is removed?

 

[darkorb223]

you no rap about killing people and selling cocaine you no good, jk

keep it up though i have a friend who's like 16 and he's amazing at rapping he can freestyle for like half an hour straight he just works at his flow

 

[nzsamurai]

meh you removed the video? :/