It needs work because right now it kind of feels like you just pasted MC over a smudged spacestock and added a couple of filters. It has too much contrast and there is really little depth and flow. It needs more flow and just general composition work.
It still has most of the same issues as the last one. Color issues, contrast issues, and flow issues. Your lighting should be more gradual and less harsh and you should work on making your light look more natural over the piece.