Poem I wrote - "The Living Dead"

Hello! I wrote a bit of a depressing poem about zombies.

The Living Dead -

 

I enjoyed that. And really respect the ability to write anything. I've tried to write poetry before but I can't. As far as the arts go I have Music and Theatre down my belt, but nothing else works for me.

 

Well if you can write songs, they're essentially the same thing. The idea behind a song or a story is to be direct, and to bluntly explain the events. A poem tends to bend toward mystery, metaphors, and imagery to wane in the events to the reader. If you can write songs, take the rhyming aspect and warp the wording a bit to not let the reader know what's fully going on just yet. Lots of description, too, but never with repetition of words. Some mainstream songs nowadays rhyme the same words together, or different spellings (like to and too), which is a big no-no and ruins the piece.

Just some advice ^_^

 

very nice it flowed very well.

 

Thanks! I like putting rhythm in my writing

 

very good mann!!!!

i wish icould write poems

 

Only typo I saw. But other than that, the words you used were very simple, and yet the thoughts felt so deep and easy to understand. Is this your first poem?

 

enjoyed it mate you got alot of things in it i forget what you call them metaphors and something else Im bad at english lol

 

mm this is actually really good
im not much of a writer myself but i appreciate good writing when i see it

 

Lol good eye, and na been writing since I was around 12, took about a 4 year break in between though Thanks for the feedback

Thanks! I'm glad people actually like it lol

 

Its alrightt, Try to get it in a book or movie.