Bullet Shells

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Bullet Shells
  1. Unread #1 - Mar 24, 2011 at 10:48 PM
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    Got bored tonight, so I wrote two pieces, both carrying the same storyline. If you don't feel like reading the short story, then feel free to move onto the poem. If you're reading both however, I'd like to ask that you start with the story so you know the context for the poem :p

    I was really tired when both were written, so don't judge toooooo hard :D

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    Beautifully terrifying.
     
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    Amazing, but dark and twisted...

    I liked it!
     
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    Only problem is the bad language, I've always had a problem with books that have "bad" swear words in it like fuck or whatever

    Other than that, it's a nicely written story, thanks:]
     
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    Pretty good, you should sell it :)
     
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    Haha to be honest I wasn't in the best of moods when I wrote the story, was going for something angry, but I get where you're coming from. I don't care for the story version at all, if I'd improve on anything it'd definitely be the poem...Kind of feel like patching it up, actually.
     
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