Lyrical matters.

Mine and raange's song:


Me:
4 gunshots and a burst!
4 bloodspots and a hurst!
Fake mutha fukas always complain when they get hurt.
I'm insane could this get worse?
Like David Blane inside the dirt.
I'll dissapear,.. then eat you're flow for my dessert.

They say my raps are on alert, atempting to convert.
U think i give a fuck? Hell i dont give a squirt!
So bring those fucking faggots, who might as well wear a skirt.
But don't call me rude, i'm just the guy who swears the flirt.

But enough with this fake shit, heres the true issue at hand.
I'm sick of all those fake rappers, who think that they are grand.
But i'll say this nice and easy, i'll try not to be bland.
This is straight from my head, none of this is planned.

It's time to stick fake MC's heads', into the sand.
Sufficate their lungs untill there chest expands.
I'll lift them up again, then maybe i'll demend.
To quit the tough guy act, and give in to my commands.

raange:
Now these MC’s think they can rebel against me
It’s tempting, to lay down some lyrical fencing
Keep a boarder around me to prevent their stepping
Coz I want nothing to do with their fake clique pretending

So I’m sittin’ here pending,
Eyes wide open like a snake presenting
Patience bending, hating and resenting
Their style is old like our relations ascending

About to break coz I’m sick of the bullshit
Statin’ they roam the hard streets with fullclips
I wanna get ‘em on stage and teach like school kids
I can’t believe I’ve actually stooped to do this
But I have to prove this, that these dudes are stupid
It gets on my nerves so much, I’m about to lose it
I’m tryin to address this issue of these fakes n defuse it
Stay true bitch, find the point and don’t lose it
Fit ya feet with whatever size the right shoe fits


EDIT: new beat thanks to RYAN: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EgTcVYgmqEk

 

let us know what you think,
its a work in progress.

this is the beat used.... http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rTLGUK6_f_I

thanks

 

lyrics seem ok,

post it over a beat an ican decide then

alot of people can drop bars on the net but aint as easy to drop on a mic and make it sound professional

but sounds good guys cant w8 for finished product

 

We have a beat, once we finished lyrics we will record.

 

awesome cant w8 man.

good luck

 

Cheers man

 

idk, i mean it rhymes n all and i could listen to it, but it looks like its a bit staged, should talk about something closer to home

 

I have no idea what that meant.

 

He means to say, why don't you write about something means something to you, like he thinks that you are kind of just writing words and not emotion. Nothing wrong with that, just you have talent and I think and Im sure he does too, that you need to bring that to another level. Try writing something more personal, and not so much about what you usually write. Its just all of your lyrics are crowd pleasers, just stay true to urself, thats all broski. Keep it real man, and keep it up you have talent man. Ciao .

 

Thanks, ive written plenty like that. But i havn't posted yet.

 

Well m8, maybe you should. Would be nice to see that ''other'' side of you. Take care and add my personal msn if you wanna [email protected]. Good to find someone with a good lyrical talent. Myspace me if you wanna: http://www.myspace.com/67444417

 

I love rap, and these lyrics are great, I especially liked Raange's bit. No offence to Rabs, your bit was great too. Can't wait for this to be recorded.

Cheers,
Syed

 

By the way Rabs. I would love for you to check out my stuff on the first pages of the poetry lyrics threads. Just under urs I think. Thanks bro.

 

Ok will do. No problem.