-*My Poem*-

[Dark_Mauler]

Here Is My Poem, I Had To Right In Class, It Is Pretty Good I Think, But Tell Me how you think: Winter' Breeze Is Flying By, Snowflakes Falling From The SKy, Children play on through the day, as the snowflackes melt away... Is It Good? Tell ME!

 

[juvenilepunk]

Pretty good a bit short but good. Remember poetry is not all about rhyme.

 

[World Domination]

Remember poetry is not all about rhyme.

Yea, many great poems don't rhyme at all.
Regardless, it's not bad, tad short like juvenilepunk said, but not too bad nonetheless.

 

[Dark_Mauler]

Well, I Try To Ryhme. Lol

 

[Ko Man]

Really nice and fluent, yet try to make it a bit longer, pretty short

 

[J a K e Y]

Its a good start, try adding on to it now, make it abit longer. Very good though up to now. ;D

 

[ezraflitcher]

Winter' Breeze Is Flying By,
Snowflakes Falling From The Sky,
Children play on through the day,
as the snowflakes melt away.

Extention?hmm..

But after the children had their fun
And when the snowflakes faced the sun
The winter breeze decided to run
Thats why Spring is so damn early.

Someday that breeze will return
And with it,a lesson learned
That when things bright come out to burn
Doesn't call for retreat haphazardly

Thank me for trying *rolls eyes*.