Str8 FreeStyle

Yo, this Oh Bama on the MIC
I'm here wondering why you saying YIKES
I turn dyke bitches in to my bitches
Leave you dead in them ditches
GO play your little cod 4 and find some more glitches
I might not be able to rap that might be a fact
But I love to play runescape and xbox live too
So fuck you oh yeah your girls swallowing my GOO!

 

Doesnt have any flow at all, lyrics could be improved aswell to make it flow.

 

You don't have any flow.
Your wack, my lyrics made you have a heart attack
Man go eat another big mac
Your so fat, your stomach sucks in the bullets from my gat.

 

I'm about to take your rhyme, make it good, record it, and put it on youtube

 

You serious? If you are i cant wait to here it. ;D

 

By the way.. a written rhyme isn't a freestyle

 

Which one are you going to take? Make sure to send me the link when your done

 

I didn't really take it because yours sucked. Just included Obama and centered the rhyme about the world



http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CD5OwNx_rwA

 

Inventors is pretty hawt I must say, yours is kinda lame sorry for the hard criticism but yeah.

 

No creativity and you have no subject. Also, work on your spelling a bit, good spelling and grammar make poetical work more pleasant to read.

 

2nd one wasn't bad the first sucked

 

yes thats the one thing tahts true
your girl is swallowing my goo
and there is noffing else to do so ill just start and slew
and whole of sythe wil lstart to boo you
cause u step on the mic and dont no what to do
you make up all these little bare and cant even folo through
trust me when i say this give your dog poo
you sound as good as noo noo
and tahts a cartoon boooom booom

lol i got bored and thought i would says this

 

wow you suck lol

 

inventors is pretty tight, shot man

 

Write in in good grammar.

And btw thats not freestyle.