TrIggA tries to rap... again

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iso constructive criticism and ratings in general
thanks ^_^

 

Timing is off... Which makes it sound really bad at times.

 

It's not too bad listen-able for me which is better than most... but one thing I would like to mention that you should critique when you're rapping fast sometimes you tend to slur a little and makes it kinda hard to understand.

 

Hmm, it's not bad at all. I don't really like your beat or timing, but other than that, nice rhymes [the ones I can understand :O], nice flow overall except for at times. Keep it up

 

argos value microphone = £3 ( ~$5)
crappy recording program - free
boredom - priceless

one day i will go studio / we - and actually record properly... but this mic makes it sound so bad.

thanks so far ^^

btw -this was oly te first attempt - im too lazy to repeat.
bad habit . lol

 

The mic isn't the problem. Commercial quality at your point is overrated. I've been in recording studios and if you don't have your stuff down, it's just going to be amplified so people that are nearly deaf realize what's going on.

You have the idea down. Not down pact but down. I don't care if you're black, white, purple or green. YOU NEED RHYTHM in order to succeed in music, especially rap. If your beat and you aren't already synced, digitally you can do that, but it's still not the same.

Normally, I'll shoot down lyrics fast but you obviously put thought into yours. Just cut out fillers like "he was", "now including", and "although" to make it more smooth and concise rap so it flows a bit.

I hope your lyrics are legit. If they're not, fix them.

About the beat.. if you're going to rap, find a beat that at least makes sense. None of this solja boy, chimpmunk garbage.

If you need a good beat and can't get any, I'll hook you up. Just hit me up with a pm or something.

 

+1.

this was what i wanted to hear ^_^

i live in the uk - im sorround by grime - which i like... but not too much.
Im a fan of rap - but not to a deep extent - so its a mixture of grime and rap to be honest

all my bars / lyrics are legit.
I find copying others efforts is time consuming and i dont feel proud whn it actually comes out good.
Im willing to succed in this... however when i write - i whisper it and it sounds great... but when it comes to actually putting the voice on the beat - its totally different from what I expected.

thanks for your honest opinion.

 

Np at all. As long as you keep it legit, without fillers like n bombs and yo said 20 times, have everything synced so it's in time, etc. then it should be decent rap.

Also, you may be confused by "bars" meaning lyrics when in actuality it means a four bar musical phrase. Maybe you just meant both lyrics and bars, I'm not sure.

Poetry is not meant to be written to a beat because you can't fit all your poetic thoughts easily into a four bar phrase if what you're writing is INSANELY HIGH quality stuff.

If I'm writing raps to a beat, I'll circle the beat for hours just for inspiration, then recite my poem to the beat and try to make it fit in as a rap.

I find just spittin lyrics helps a lot with flow, without having any beat there to guide you.

 

Considering British rap normally sucks (in comparison to American) it was pretty good.

 

my memory sucks - at times takes me a while to remember vocab...
however i get random good rhymes :

His addiction was driving him ill
every night depriving him of meals
he'd sit down and start feasting on handfuls of pills
crackhead soldier, he'd beat his enemies
then dive for the kil

i got that on my way home.. on the bus - staring out the window. lol

im random at times..
i have no patience and at times it takes forever for anything good to sprout.. hence you may read one or two good 'bars' (in england differend - slang for lyrics on the beat type lol) - and rest so so..
normally i write so much in a day but i throw it away - never to be seen or revived.

write without the beat huh?
then how am i gonna fit it in
i know that most beats tend to follow a general style - im not a great musiciam.. i loved singing but my voice broke - piano - forgot how to play... i love poetry and this shit inspires me.

well im off its 1am and i gotta wake up at 6

appreciate your time



edit

considering the amount of undiscovered talent - there are many good mcs there
look up black the ripper, dot rotten, devline, ghetto - amazing flow - powerful lyrics
its just putting your mind in the right state to bear and listen .. and try to understand

 

Agreed. The highest quality rap you'll find doesn't usually come from sitting in a dark corner, crying, spilling your emotions out, and writing. It's random. You just get a beat or a feeling and jam out or just go with it.

 

probobly music quality, but it sounds like you mumble :s
i like the background music? is it ripped, or have you acctually made it?
good beat's, suit's the song.

you are and OK rapper. i would acctually try vocal training.
you could end up like somewhat the music Bliss N Eso make. try listen to it.(aussies, i know you are english, but. well )

 

I liked it... I've never really listened to any one from the UK rapping.

 

It was pretty good man, I liked it.

 

thanks for positive feedback
mumbling was cos i didnt prepare
this was a first off one off.

I got into a bad habit - when I write I whisper...
it comes out wrong when I actually go all vocal.

Vocal training - hmmm (runs over to youtube)
serious note though - sounds like a good idea - my voice is messed. People have rated my bars (lyrics) as good... but suggest for me to put on a voice. lol.

ah well

 

I liked the story lol had no speakers for rap but the story was awesome

 

well i rekon it was alright im with you dude do it for fun to fill in time etc lol

gl with the rest of ur rapping hope to hear more of it

 

sounds funny when english ppl say "bang bang" made me lol irl

 

i can imagine :huh:

ty for all feedback

 

Hey Trigga, are you of Asian descent? You sound kind of chinese.