Who wants to read my American Lit paper?

didn't bother to read the whole thing, but what I read sounds very educated. Also, change it so it doesn't sound so much like a song at the beginning and end, use some copyasta, it works.

 

Good job. I'm adding your MSN btw

 

Very well written. Good song too, so +5

 

Wow.. that gets deep and then educational.. flows really good.. Just one problem :S the beginning (I was listening to rap earlier) sounded like a rap song to me lol. But other than the song intro. Nice one

P.S. Teachers don't listen to any rap/rock so they will read it like an into }:]

 

well written, not my style song, if you can add a mathing melody it can be great. 8/10

 

Language well used, interesting theory, What mark did you get/ will you get?

 

Although Jesus Christ is a good example of a leader, it would not be smart to mention him in a paper. As religion is a touchy subject, and if the reader is a non-Christian, he/she could get offended.

Also I see you are using him as a historical figure. There is much dispute over the existence of Jesus. But there is much dispute over Shakespeare's existence also right? Yes but according to the Bible, Jesus had a phenomenal impact on the world, he walked around performing miracles and saving people, and he became widely known around the world. But Shakespeare only wrote plays for the locals, and did some traveling. But personally I do not think Jesus Christ existed since philosophers and historians did not start writing about him until 40-60 years after his death, even though news of this Jesus and his miracles quickly spread like wildfire across the world.

Otherwise I think you used your grammar well and overall this was a good essay.

 

When is it due?
If not soon would you mind if I helped you correct a few things I noticed?

 

Who wants to read my term paper of the themes of Mabeth? Noone, 1500 words of pure raw shit.

Yours on the other hand is interesting and I really do agree with your points.

(excuse the crappy gramar, I'm sick of typing)

 

Very well written, interesting opening sequence.

 

Sure, when I get back from my SAT tutor I will post some of the small errors on it, that teachers probably won't take off for.