So, Rap music..

Alright, I'm fourteen, and I've been listening to rap for a few years, and wrote some small things, tell me what you guys thing.
I lost most my stuff, due to throwing it out, so, only got a little. I don't think it's good really, but friends say it's alright.

• Just.. I used to keep shit bottled, and it hurts deep into my soul.
  The pains got harder to bear and to fuckin' hold, didn't know if I could bear it no longer, ya' know?
  But this shit keeps me from being the meanest fucker you'll ever know.
  Hey, no life can be perfect though, even if you don't know the true meaning of pain, you could be hurtin on the inside, yo'.
  So take your shit off this world and turn your life to peace, make yourself feel, like your something to be. Something amazing, as far as we see.
  
  
  
• This shit is bothering me to where I'm gettin skitzo, insane this motherfuckin' pain is gettin me pissed off, down and then, corrupt again, I fucking get hit again, cus with this bitch I can't win, thrown down to shit, beat out to bliss, cus these mothufuckas' couldn't even grasp this shit, I pulled it off, just to have it happen again, and I'm not, just gonna sit back it's not happenin, I will get in your face, fucking scream, spit back with rage, and give you a reason to be, the hateful bitch, that won't stop eating at me, ungratefulness, cus' you've never believed in me, leaving me distasteful, cus' I hate you and it's easy to see.

Anyways, what do you guys think?

 

it's better than most of the lyrics in any soulja boy song, I'll give you that. Albeit you have some work to do, but it's a good start for someone who's 14.

 

Thanks, I just found the first two I could find through this computer I had made.
I plan to make more, with better word choices and such.

 

no problem, and do it sonn. also if you could, check out my lyrics and post what you think about them? thanks.

 

Aight, will do.