Second Sig Attept

Here's my first attempt at a sig:



Here's my second:



Any please help me to improve on my sig-making skills, constructive criticism is appreciated.

 

The first one just looks like you fucked with filters and the render, but the second one looks like you over-killed with C4D's. I like the border on the second one, though.

EDIT: By the way, this is int he wrong section. Next time, post your work in the GFX Showcase.

 

umm 1st one is fail...
and the 2nd only has good strokes, nothing else :S keep it going :#