Collage 3 page assignment tips, advice, spellcheck, anytime of help PLEASE.

College and any type* please excuse my rushed spelling. * 3 pages double spaced. just found this out. So basically just need 1 more page.

OK time for all the smart people of sythe to STEP UP. please?
Alright I have this 3 page assignment do this week on the book 1984 which is about a totalitarian state controlling helpless civilians and brainwashing them and controlling there every thought and what they do. Anyways I am doing my 3 pages on the topic I chose 'Room 101' and I MUST stick to that topic.

I HAVE NO IDEA HOW TO COME UP WITH 3 PAGES.. All help is welcome hell if you help right the remaining 3 pages I can hook ya up with some PayPal or runescape cash.

This is what i have so far.

Room 101, the last place anyone wants to be. This room is a hell for every person. The room where every person meets his/her worst fear. People are sent there after already enduring much suffering. If you are being sent to room 101 than there is a reason, that reason being once your there its known that you will confess everything and willing to do whatever to get out, the pain is to much to endure. When you are sent to room 101 your not that sure what you will find there, you just know that it is not the place you want to be. Its known that room 101 is the place where everyone meets his or her worst fear whatever that may be. If your not like most people that are brainwashed your subject to punishment if caught. Such as Winston Smith himself who fights against the totalitarian state and is punished for doing so. The state Oceania consists of brainwashed civilians, daily propaganda, and torture. Winston is one of very few that is unable to agree with the party and existence of big brother. In a state such as this everyone is expected to and forced to blind faith. So the purpose of room 101 is have the 'fighters' who refuse to follow and believe the nonsense that is constantly being told sent there for forced brainwashing y. Basically If the party and image of big brother failed to brainwash you than room 101 will not.

 

You have many grammar related issues and poor sentence structure in general. I'll provide examples from one specifically rough section.

Your = you're or you are
its = it's or it is
to = too

You're basically restating the same idea twice and using the same, old ideas. The primary verb you have been using is 'is', and I'd suggest changing it up a bit too.

I'm too tired to give more advice on this. Get one of your parents/guardians to proof read it. Use a spell check as well. You spelled totalitarian wrong along with existence, nonsense, believe, basically, etc...

 

double post, sorry but there was a big delay there making me think I haven't posted anything.

 

Thanks, your help and advice is very much appreciated, I've changed it up a bit.

 

Make sure that you want to describe it as much as possible. Make the reader feel as if he/she were actually there.

An example could be:
" A dark, gloomy room filled with an odor that intensifies as it's approached further in."

Also, readers like to read dialogue. Make sure to add people talking. Don't use the word 'said' all the time, such as "What will we do in this room?!" she said. Use words like 'he screamed', 'he yelled', 'he shouted' etc.

 

Thanks Dave, that helped alot. I actually only need 1 more page. I found out it has to be double spaced.