Real lyrics from me (Need a MCs help!)

Now I grew up around hip hip got an idea to lets some stress out through a song about my life which will probably really help me. Im a bit of a perfectionist which is why im looking for all the help I can get. So im looking for help from anyone with experience that could help make my lyrics sound right with this instrumental
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lwE36_pV6vQ

Now these lyrics and deep and alot of people will here the song when I make it your help is much apreciated.

lyrics
hello, day 1 i know nothing but somethins comin im not ready laghing cryin excited
to be welcomed to this thing called earth given birth by a princess, a queen, the only
one i deem my mother like no other forced to raise and live a totalarian lifestyle
in a modern society. My brain taken advantage of, im unstoppable just follow me you
have to take my throne when im gone. Im growing irrational and in denial believling all
the pathological lies i was told growing old. but no, knowing somethings wrong and missing
i broke the number one rule, asking logical questions and being curious. i would
not fall victim to the dictator no i was born to be something greater and later cater to
the slaved queen who practiced acting her life away so that we may some day escape.
My mind cant hadnle the comotion the reality is scaring me im free but it doesnt seem
like what i imagined, im suffering my life will never be the same its not a game we were
children fighting a war unaware of how violent and grusome it was, left with experiences
that would later criple us when reality set in. 21 one years in, im angry vengence
streaming through my bloodline but no your plan didnt work ima forget you and do me
your a fool, selfish and miserable, coming back later wont do no good, you cant visit
someone you shot stabbed and paralyized and act as if nothing happened, the battle scars
remain as you continue to laugh at them remember never again will we be as life goes on
will continue to see in the end you will be the one to bleed.

 

Pretty good, definitely some meaningful lyrics and I'm sure they mean alot more to you than I could tell by reading it. I just wish I knew exactly how you flowed it.

 

If you put that into some propper grammar lyric sheet it would be sweet, its very meaningful and you can tell your talking about your life by just reading it, myself I'm only 16 but if you could do it good, I think it'd be sweet, gl bro.