Violence Rap

In college I have to create a Rap which Im going to perform for a short video Im performing in, the rap has to be about violence, and has to big up some people who I chill with in the film;

I chill with;

Pammy G
JD -------obsessed with saying "what u sayin?" LOL
Marcus Lee
Scott --------------obsessed with saying 'what the fetch' LOL
Abi
Danny Lee

Anyhow, the music im using is this;

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9CXmFr7ONQA

and the bars I came up with so far are;


Ill give it to you, you've got the confidence,
but don't start fights, just drop the violence,
yeah, 1 in a million, that's rare you know,
so offer what you got, let the beat drop yo!

Your mashed up, stoned up and college is nahh,
but your lifes messed up n lifes's not going very far,
Down and out, thats what your fam says,
your sick of it, itz like oh my dayzzzz,


Were chillin on now, with miss pammy g,
and a very sick guy, hes called marcus lee,
don't forget. what ya sayin JD?
what the fetch scott, abi and danny lee.

Left hook Madder,
Right hook Badder,
Headbutt Stagger,
live your life, climb the ladder. X2

fucked up, cut up, feeling so colder,
smacked up, shut up,keep going soldier,
bleeding in the inside, crushed by a boulder,
loving that lass, n ya just wanna hold her.

violence, It solves nothing,
so chill now, n give your friend a ring?
Chill out, Chillax, Do the ring thing init,
been there, done that, ya dun need to hit init

To be continued...

Any ideas or thoughts on improvements? message me or add my msn in my sig, help would be MUCH appreciated.

 

heatbutt stagger - footwork swagger