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its weird looking, but i like it, tell me what you think, and how i can improve.

 

Seems cluttered & doesn't flow one bit.

A resounding 3/10 from me.

 

Well I actually like it a lot, I wouldn't even know how to tell you how to improve because its a style I haven't seen before. Right side seems a bit blank.

 

The render ruins it; it feels completely discontinuous with the rest of the sig in color, sharpness, and the flow. I'm also having trouble making out exactly what the render is - ie, what he's holding, and why it's cut off as it is.

I like the use of white space though; there's often a lot to be said for simplicity.

 

I initially thought it was an original abstract, in which case it was an amazing original feeling to my brain. Now seeing that most of the work is in the render and a few effects, it's an amazingly original feeling that you could play off as your style in the future if you were to make mock-ups based on this, in more works.

I think that you should practice the effect given here with more original works (pen/paper?) of yours, to see where it leads.

 

thanks for the input. dont get why all sig's need flow, to me they dont.
its actually 2 renders, one is an anime picture from a final fantasy game poster and the other white area was a c4d that i foudn on planetrenders.
he is holding a batton by the way lol
i have a tablet that im trying to get better at using, it takes a while for me to draw something i actually like it sucks. but ill probably try more of this style using the tablet instead of c4d's i find.
thanks again for the input

 

Really cool, I like it. Very interesting look to it.

might have made the red negative area a bit more solid, might have looked interesting?

 

lol i tried having the red area just red, but then the whole sig looks a bit plain, with the white areas and then the extra plain red areas