New Style - Experimental

I was aiming for something like Alternaz's (or someone, can't remember) vertical tag or w/e, but I don't know where it is.
Anyways, here it is:



C&C?
Yeah I know it sucks, but I tried new stuff here.


EDIT: Oh and I used this stock from the website T R 1 B A L suggested in his 'secrets' (Lookbook.nu).

 

Anyone?

 

I know it blows but it was experimental. Advice please?