My SOTW 3 Entry... Critisimismsismmsmsmm Please

CnC appreciated...

Current Edited:
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HUGE thanks to Kola, Kristian4th, T R 1 B A L, frozenrain, and Haunted for all your help/improvements!
ESPECIALLY Kola!, you helped me make it into an AWESOME siggy

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huge negative space, and a space of around 40px on the left that's pure black?

 

So true... I noticed that before I even uploaded it, but I couldn't think of any way to reduce it. I tried a bit of smudging and adding background imagery to it, but nothing turned out the way I wanted it.
Any recommendations/ideas?

 

Add some pattern. Since u used lightning in the girl picture, I recommend smudging of cloud patterns.

 

What do you mean exactly? A repetitive almost floral pattern such as:


or rather than a pattern, a smudged image of clouds?

 

Stock and effects seem Low quality.

 

I think smudged patterns of clouds as in u take a cloud render and feather effect both the inside and out, making it blend into the black space. Then you copy that layer and smudge it a few times to cover that black spot.

 

I worked on in a tiny bit before seeing this reply... I'm not sure if it's what you had in mind.
The pattern one looks horrendous, but the cloud one looks "OK" though still not good...

 

I think it's too big to be honest, and the smudging/floral patterns on your 2nd and 3rd version aren't very good, you could try reducing the size and reduce the negative space on the left hand side, you could make it work. Also, I'd reduce the effects on the focal, too.

 

Unless I completely redo a brand new sig, it's a bit hard to go back now

 

I'll fiddle around a bit with the sizing, it may also help reduce the ammount of black/negative space. I agree that the patterns and smudging aren't too good I don't have much experience smudging, so I'm sure that it could've been done a lot better.... Any ideas on HOW to reduce the negative space any more?

 

By reducing the size you'll be reducing the negative space, you could also add more effects to the left hand side.

 

Of all of them, I like this one the best, has good balance, I fiddled around with the sizing and negative space a bit more, and also made sure I didn't overwork the render...
Whadya think?

 

A huge improvement, now you need to work on the right hand side

 

Ah Shoot haha, I'm off to bed, but I'll continue working on it tomorrow... Cheers for the help everyone!

 

This is fantastic. Although theres some negative space left over, lightings a bit off as is placement of the render.

 

I attempted to work on a few of these things you pointed out, whadya think?

 

Much better. if you use adobe photoshop, go to render > lighting effects and use that for light. Either Omni or Spotlight. Remember to put the opacity of it down a bit though otherwise itll be too light on her face and too dark around the edges.

 

You took my advice? . cause if you did then im a genius cause that looks good ^.^

 

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