My rap--- Please comment ---:)

The people im singing too mean the most to me
im doing this for you mom dad mike and daisy,
people want to hate let em hate im motivated by there jealousy,
i need can't keep private now i need to be with publicity,
no more staying in the dark, waiting for a miracle to happen,
time to wake up, bring the stakes up, and just start rappen
problem these days everyone thinks there so hot,
we got some fagots like youngmoney and jb that think
they made there song drop, rap will never be the same,
its a fact we have to handle, i might never make it big
thats a fact i might have to battle,
its like im rowing this boat with out a paddle.
but we gotta face the facts,
we need a miracle, like god giving us back big and pac
it would help if we got back proof and soulja slim,
for now im okay with em,





Not finished but comment on this lol thanks

 

Few grammatical errors but other than that looks awesome

 

I think this goes in the Music subsection of Off-Topic.

 

Use the Music section bro. It sounds decent, but it needs more then an ABAB flow.

 

iight if someone can move it

and yh i didint rly pay attention to the grammer so there might be some

 

bumps ?

 

Why would you bump, lol.

Anyways good job but yeah could use some grammatical work.