Is this grammatically correct?

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Is this grammatically correct?
  1. Unread #1 - May 31, 2011 at 11:39 PM
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    Is this grammatically correct?

    How would I make this sentence grammatically correct? I get confused with colons and semi-colons and shit.

    ""He finds a job as a porter at a hotel and continues his life in his new found interest, politics, and more specifically, socialism.""

    thanks. =]
     
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    Is this grammatically correct?

    He finds a job as a porter, at a hotel, and continues his life in his new found interest, politics, and more specifically, socialism.
     
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    Is this grammatically correct?

    Thanks. I'm also looking for other ways I can word that sentence. It just sounds weird to me. I'll use your's for now.
     
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    Is this grammatically correct?

    "He finds a job as a porter at a hotel and continues his life in his newfound interest, socialist politics." is better

    "He finds a job as a hotel porter and subsequently became interested in socialist politics" is even better

    It's less awkward in the past

    "He found a job as a hotel porter and subsequently became interested in socialist politics."
     
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    Is this grammatically correct?

    I wouldn't use the word subsequently because he discovered his interest before he got the job as a porter.. I want to portray that it was a continued interest and an ongoing thing. Basically, a new interest and job creates another chapter in his life.

    I'd like to try and stick with something similar to "and more specifically, socialism." at the end.


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    Is this grammatically correct?

    His new job as a porter rekindled his passion for politics.

    If they aren't really related try using two sentences to convey what you want to say.
     
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