Is this a legit sentence?

[Arya]

Does this sentence contain any gay mishaps that I'm just too gone to notice?...
Is it a run-on?
Could it exist in a Research paper?

"From groups like the Rock Steady Crew, who is made up of some of the original Japanese bboy dancers since their start in 1977, and who’s influence has spread across the globe from franchisee organizations, further making popular the art of Hip Hop dance, to dancers like MC Hammer and Kid-N-Play, who’s image has been seen and become a house-hold name by millions since the 80’s, Hip Hop earns it’s depiction as a dance that embodies and flaunts the fact of it’s multi-cultural personality."

Thaaaankyou.

 

[kill dank]

Run on and should be broken in a few places.

I would either make it into two + sentences or remove some words.

But I'm not an English teacher nor is it my decision.

The information can definitely be a part of a research paper though.

 

[Spinney]

Run on and should be broken in a few places.

I would either make it into two + sentences or remove some words.

But I'm not an English teacher nor is it my decision.

The information can definitely be a part of a research paper though.

I second this. Also, "From groups like the Rock Steady Crew, who is made up.." the is should be "are."

 

[howcow95]

From groups like the Rock Steady Crew, who are made up of some of the original Japanese b-boy dancers since their start in 1977, and who’s influence has spread across the globe from franchisee organizations, further making popular the art of Hip Hop dance. From dancers like MC Hammer to Kid-N-Play, who’s image has been seen and become a house-hold name by millions since the 80’s. Hip Hop earns it’s depiction as a dance that embodies and flaunts the fact of it’s multi-cultural personality.

I fixed it the best I could.