Just a little something off the dome. In progress.

"My serial killer rhymes got me murderin' all these dimes, n I stay up on my flow, like a hustla wit this dough. I'm out there errday, all I'm doins gettin paid. Mayn I ball fuckin hard from the top to the bottom and the swag never stop, bitch I got my shit on locked...down.

Haters tryna jock but I keep my shit cocked... back incase they tryna blast, I know they tryna pass me, but I ain't gonna have it. "

All I got so far, not the greatest but meh. Just seeing what people think of this little bit.

 

murdering 'dimes' would mean that you are killing very attractive women, so for that, fuck u.

Nah but I know what you were trying to say. It seems that you are focusing
on the style of rap that is the reason for the hate that the rap genre recieves,
like money, murder etc. It's been played out, too many people do this style.

But if you've just started writing, keep practicing. Don't just write the first
thing that comes to mind that rhymes, work on your rhymes, try to tell stories,
each time you write raps, you will eventually notice urself that you are improving.

I'm not hating when I say this but, you probably think you are pretty good
at rhyming, but if you keep on practicing, in a few years, you will look back
at these sorta rhymes that you've done and laugh at them coz you will have
improved so much. Trust me. You are definitely not the worst I've seen.
If you keep on with it, you'll learn about different rhyme schemes and patterns and
create your own even, there's also things like matching syllables each line
and more complex rhyming, like rhyming multi-syllables.

I wasn't expecting to write this much, so ima stop. keep it up

 

Haha thanks, very constructive comment. Yeah, usually I don't even listen to that type of music, but I was at work bored and was just messin around flowing and stuff and writing some down. Thanks for the comment though!